My Novel: Father Figure (Week 13 – Thursday, November 2nd, 2017)

It’s been a few weeks since I posted the current status of my second novel, Father Figure. As many of you know, my debut novel, Watching Glass Shatter, launched 3 weeks ago and has taken over a majority of my time. In between marketing plans, book review, blog tours and promotions, I have been slowly making progress with all the edits for the next round of Father Figure beta reading. When I set a date, I don’t change it unless absolutely necessary; I’m happy to report I am still on target for an early 2018 release. Below is the current status:


Status: Thursday, November 2, 2017 – Week #13


Round 1 Edit – The First Draft

  • Every potential change suggested by the initial beta reading team has been reviewed, digested and addressed with the exception of 3 major items that all require a dedicated about of time where I can focus and plan. This is where I need to start turning off the internet for 4 hours each day to dive into the details without interruption.  To give you a flavor of what I am referring to:
    • Add more raw/griping emotion to the initial few chapters and remove/move some of the background information (Get less wordy and get into the action!)
    • Tighten up the character details, voice and tone for 1 protagonist who is a little too wishy-washy (Be clear on what she wants from others!)
    • Lengthen and draw out the ending a bit more to keep the suspense even more climactic (Don’t end this journey so quickly!)


Next Steps: Plan for Upcoming Week

  • Complete editing for 2 of the 3 key areas, as noted above
  • Read entire novel aloud with a focus on dialogue and point-of-view to ensure everything is consistent, clear and distinct
  • Determine who is interested in being a beta reader for Round 2 (target for readers to review from 11/20 to 11/30)


What’s on the author’s mind?

  • How believable do readers expect the plot of a novel to be? For example, if in reality, a situation occurs 2% of the time, and the book takes advantage of that situation, is it fair to judge the author or book by calling it out as unbelievable? Some say books should push the envelope and encourage limitless boundaries. Others feel if its a contemporary novel it should be something more common and relatable. I tend to fall somewhere in the middle. If the actual occurrence of the situation happening is fairly minimal, but still achievable, I think the author should do as much as possible in the novel’s narrative, dialogue and tone to clearly explain and show why even though it’s rare, it can happen. How do you feel?
  • Sometimes a character in a book is going on a journey and has certain beliefs or ideas about life. It may be different than the readers’ beliefs or expectations on how the journey should happen. There may be less action and more conversation in the story to help the character determine their goals. How do readers feel about this being a bigger part of the plot of a book? For instance, if someone is trying to make a decision as part of their story arc, is putting them through a few situations that might see like inconsistent behavior for them considered ‘acceptable’ or ‘frustrating’ to the reader? How do you feel?


I appreciate everyone’s input and feedback. Thank you and have a great week!



Summary of Father Figure (only read if you’re new to the book)

  • Amalia Graeme, sheltered and abused for most her life in Mississippi, longs to escape her difficult family and small hometown in 1984. When her older brother returns with his best friend, Amalia is tempted to have her first experience with a boy that summer. As they head off to college for her first year and his senior year, she begins to learn about life and love, battling her loss of innocence with the attraction she’s developed to an older professor. After she suffers a few personal tragedies, Amalia is forced to head back home, uncertain how to handle the permanent impacts on her life and future. No matter where she turns, someone or something always takes away her possibility of hope.
  • Brianna Porter is desperate to discover the purpose of her life, develop confidence in who she is, accept the consequences of who she has fallen in love with, and discover her father’s identity. Set twenty years in the future in New York City, there’s a connection between these two women’s stories that is about to be discovered. As Brianna stumbles upon her mother’s old journal, she learns a shocking secret about her father, rocked by a truth that could completely change the future. It may be too late to deal with the impacts of unleashing a history that was meant to stay buried for many reasons. When it leads to someone’s death, Brianna must come to terms with the choices she’s made and what is left of her own future.


About Me
I am a writer. I recently published my first novel, Watching Glass Shatter, with multiple 5-star reviews on Amazon and Goodreads. I am writing my second novel, Father Figure, with plans to finish and submit it to a publisher in December, 2017. As part of the process to engage with my fans and followers, I am publishing a weekly status on the progress of this second book. For a description of this book, check out the post where my friends and followers voted for this book as my second novel.

Beyond these two books, I have a number of short stories, poems and other novels in various shapes and forms. I also read A LOT. First the book review goes on Goodreads, and then I send it on over to my WordPress blog at, where you’ll also find TV & Film reviews, Tags, Awards, Age/Genre/Book Reads and Author Alerts, as well as the revealing and introspective 365 Daily Challenge.

You can also access my social media profiles to get the details on the who/what/when/where and my pictures. Leave a comment and let me know what you think. Vote in the poll and ratings. Thanks for stopping by. Note: All written content is my original creation and copyrighted to me, but the graphics and images were linked from other sites and belong to them. Many thanks to their original creators.


  1. great progress jay! you’re doing so good. i am very proud of you!
    as for the characters choices. there will never be the best choice for a reader. you can agree or disagree. but that’s good, because not every person would handle anything the same way. so, i think it’s good, when you get frustrated as a reader. the only thing, that for me is important, that it’s relateable. i need to feel why this character did that choice, even if i don’t agree with it. you know what i mean? it needs to make sense.

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  2. On a personal level, I have no probs with lots of narrative and/or conversation as long as it keeps me interested and, yes, is believable. I’m not into sci-fi or fantasy, so I don’t want to have these types of scenarios in a conventional fiction novel. That said, I’m fine with (even enjoy) situations that are over-the-top or slapstick-silly, that yes, could be construed as impossible or of “yeah really?” quality. You should go with your gut, Jay; you know your characters better than anyone else. Put yourself in his/her shoes (mind and heart). 🙂


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